25 November 2011

SFFS: An Excerpt from "Shadow World"

After taking a week off, I'm back again with another excerpt for this week's Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday. I'm once again digging into the first draft barrel, with a little short story I'm hoping to sneak into a future installment of the Triple-Shots (and if you don't know what that is, head on over and check out the first one). All of the warnings about first draft material aside, hope you enjoy this excerpt from my Aston West short story (tentatively titled) "Shadow World":

The central figure of the three stepped forward and called out, “You brought the goods?”

“Sure did.”

“Show us."

Salty sweat covered my lips as I responded, “Show me the money first.”

He grimaced, which made me think things were about to go south. I glanced back at my ship, doubtful that even sprinting, I’d make it without getting shot.

His voice caught my attention once more. “We figured you might be a bit more distrusting, once we got word about your dealings with Angelika.”

I froze at the name of a blue-skinned black marketer, the same profession these three presumably were. Her double-crosses had been countered by my own, more than a few times.

So, if you enjoyed it (or not), leave a comment...I like interacting with folks.


  1. Ooh! Angelika. Definitely want to meet her. Great stuff! I picked up Heros. Can't wait to get to it. Your stuff seems right up my alley.


  2. If you want to meet Angelika, head on over to my short story page and check out Little White Truths (my first published short story) for free. She's also got a starring role in the story Turnabout (also available from my short story page). Poor Aston has this knack for bringing out the worst in people. ;-)

  3. Poor Aston doesn't have much of a clue of how to win friends, does he? Heh.

    I like the subtle tension in this.

  4. Yup, Aston's life certainly stands in the way of making what most consider friends. Actually, that's one of the main topics I plan to cover in the short story I plotted out last week, "Demons Within".

    Thanks, you guys, for stopping by and commenting!

  5. Poor Aston, never catches a break. I suspect things will definitely go south in this story...great stuff, as always.

  6. If things don't go south, stories tend to be quite boring, in my experience. ;-)

    Thanks for stopping by!

  7. Intriguing snippet! I'm going to have to add your books to my ever-growing TBR-list! :D

  8. Finally figured out how to leave comments! This deal sound a little on the shady side.

  9. Aston's a pretty shady character as it is, so he tends to find a lot of situations like this...

    Thanks for stopping by, all!

  10. Could he have landed himself any deeper in doo-doo?! lol. :D

  11. Nice tension! Good job building the story through dialog here.

  12. Trust me, Pippa Jay, it gets even deeper... :-)

    Thanks, Heidi! :-)


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