07 December 2012

SFFS: A Snippet From SEEKER

Welcome to another installment of Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday on the blog. Thanks for all the feedback you give on my snippets, and be sure to go visit all of the other writers through the SFFS link above as well.

For those who like a little romance, this is pretty much as close as I get. Aston faces off against a mind invader (sort of like a mind reader, but a lot more involved) who could find out every criminal activity he's ever committed in my novella Seeker. And for those who don't like to pay for their books, I'll point out that this novella is currently discounted down to FREE over at Omnilit (and who doesn't like free?).
I was privy to a lot of information not meant for anyone to know, much of it illegal activities. I’d mistakenly thought my present innocence would lead to freedom. Now, it seemed past misdeeds might be my downfall.

Fear building, I followed the officer, who watched with a subtle laugh under his breath. He hadn’t reprimanded his subordinate this time, which meant I’d used up my one get-out-of-being-assaulted-free card.

He let loose his chuckle. “Afraid of a pretty woman?”

I didn’t bother to answer, instead figuring out my options. I couldn’t fend off another mental invasion.

In other words, I was screwed.

Poor Aston...he has enough troubles in life without being subjected to a mind invader. Hope all of you are enjoying the holiday season, and we'll catch you next week with another snippet.


  1. Great Snippet! Always a fan of the galley walk scene and what goes through the character's head as they go. Makes for some interesting details - just like you did here.

  2. You're right--I do like free things. I'll happily take more time with Aston. Loved the snippet--his inner monologue is always so enjoyable to follow along. He's plain about his situations with a twist of smart-ass that's perfect. I also love the idea of a mind invader. The actual invasion has got to be an interesting scene.

  3. Thanks for stopping by, everyone! Yes, this is a great galley walk scene (unfortunately, with only 10 sentences, you only catch this portion of it)...and I enjoyed writing the invasion scenes, myself.

  4. I love the officer's snide comment about fearing pretty women - the juxtaposition with Aston's final line is hilarious. Great snippet!

  5. It also looks like he's not passing Go and collecting $200, either. He'd better create a cap made from aluminum foil and fast!

  6. So is the mind reader a pretty woman?

  7. Peter, Aston should definitely fear them, because it seems like every time he gets involved with one, it ends up badly for him. :-)

    Patrick, if only the aluminum foil would work... :-)

    Sue Ann, she's drop-dead gorgeous...but alas, all the description came in before this snippet. One of the hazards of the 10 sentence-limit.

  8. Cool, freebie, will snatch it up. Love freebies from writers i know!

    As for Our Hero, this sounds dire!

  9. Who wouldn't be worried about a mental invasion... but when you have a head full of stuff that shouldn't get out...

    Poor Aston!

    But nice snippet!


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