31 August 2012

SFFS: The Vision's Origins (another snippet from "Genesis")

Welcome to another installment of Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday on the blog. Thanks for all the feedback you give on my snippets, but be sure to go visit all of the other writers through the SFFS link above as well.

As mentioned last week, I'm slowly bringing out snippets from "Genesis," a story that I'd written long ago. So, if you didn't catch the previous snippets, here are a few links to get you back up to speed.

Snippet 1
Snippet 2
Snippet 3
Snippet 4
Snippet 5
Snippet 6
Snippet 7 

The boys have just found out they were the subject of a vision's foretelling. Now they're about to find out where the vision came from in today's snippet:
I rubbed my temples. “Where’d this vision come from, the bottom of a bottle?”

He scowled at me. “My vision came from the only One who can bring the truth.”

“And who would that be?”

“The Creator of all things, the Maker of the universe,” he tried to explain.

I cringed, remembering my previous run-ins with his kind. They either wanted money as a tribute to their gods or threatened force if one denied their supremacy. Though the gods and the methods always changed, they all ended up causing problems.

“Listen, friend, we want no trouble,” I told him, holding up my empty hands with palms faced forward while scooting away from the table.

Be sure to come back next week for yet another installment. Again, I always enjoy your comments!


  1. This is great - surely this can't end well!

  2. Not for someone, that's for sure...but remember, we still need to figure out what's in the satchel, and why the group of rowdy beasts are so interested in Gabriel. :-)

    Thanks for stopping by!

  3. I am willing to bet that, despite his wishes, he may already have a mess of trouble. Looking forward to more!

  4. Start running! Run away, run away.

    I'm gonna have to read the last few snippets in order to get a heads up (since I've been 'away' for a spell). Good stuff as always!!

  5. I love it! Very touchy thing to deal with religious zealots who have their sights set on you. Great snippet.

  6. Bet he's not going to get away that easily!

  7. Wonderful mix of dialog and introspection--provides just the right amount of info and intrigue without slowing down the pace. I'm ready to read more!

    :) Heidi

  8. Patrick and Sue Ann, I'm willing to bet you're both right! :-)

    TK, if you wait until tomorrow, I have a post that's going to summarized the story to this point. ;-)

    JC, indeed!

    Thanks, Heidi! :-)


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